What do you think could be the main issues with this poorly written entertainment news story?: Robert Pattinson talks about his new film, The Rover, with Dave O’Neil.
‘Robert Pattinson talks about his new film, The Rover, with Dave O’Neil’
The very first thing that sticks out with the O’Neil (2014) article is that everything looks chunky and not something that appeals to the eyes. The story is over crowded with trivial information and the reporter tells the event in a fictional way (O’Neil 2014). According to Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith (2012) news stories should be broken up into small paragraphs which this article has clearly not done.
I cannot tell if we are supposed to believe that Robert Pattinson was actually talking to him. Or if we are to assume by the way the story and the lead is written that the bodyguard stopped the interaction between the reporter and the actor (O’Neil 2014).
According to Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith (2012, p.87) ‘the most important thing of all, at least for writers today, is to strip language clean, to lay it bare down to the bone’. Which has clearly not been done in this article.
His personal comments during the article about Twilight and the joke about the bodyguard mistaking him for a werewolf O’Neil (2014), could actually be considered offensive to some audiences; especially Twilight fans who might have read it.
Another problem found with this article is the information provided has nothing to do with the title which is about Robert Pattinson’s new movie (O’Neil 2014).
My personal feelings about the article is that the title should be changed from ‘Robert Pattinson talks about his new film, The Rover, with Dave O’Neil’ to ‘my experience at the party with Robert Pattinson in it.’
One good aspect is that if the audience is looking for a story that is simply entertaining and not in any way revealing about the new movie then I would suggest it. Reading the story does provide a few laughs as the reporter had used a comedic tone throughout most of it.
What do you think is good about this well-written media release?: ‘Drought worst in living memory’
‘Drought worst in living memory’
The very first thing that sticks out with the Agforce (2015) article is that it looks neat, short and pleasing to the eye. However, the subject was not one of personal interest to me which made it rather hard to read all of it.
In the Agforce (2015) article another reason on why it was hard to read might be that there was a lot of statistical data all clumped together. It could have been given more spacing between dot points to make it easier to read, or the statistical data could been separated and made more simplistic (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith 2012).
One last thing that was a problem for me is that because I do not know much about farming or about most of the financial details it made it harder for me to understand what the article was talking about (Agforce 2015). This would limit the readers as it is not produced in a way that anyone could simply read it and understand it (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith 2012).
One good aspect about the story is that the beginning and the ending of the article is fairly easy to read and understand. Another good aspect is that the article is rather factual, impersonal and provides in depth detail about the issue it is covering.
Agforce 2015, Drought worst in living memory: AgForce survey, digital image, viewed 4 August 2015, http://www.agforceqld.org.au/index.php?tgtPage=news&id=view,478
O’Neil, D 2014, Robert Pattinson talks about his new film The Rover with Dave O’Neil, digital image, viewed 4 August 2015, http://www.smh.com.au/entertainment/robert-pattinson-talks-about-his-new-film-the-rover-with-dave-oneil-20140619-zs99j.html
Agforce 2015, Drought worst in living memory: AgForce survey, viewed 4 August 2015, http://www.agforceqld.org.au/index.php?tgtPage=news&id=view,478
O’Neil, D 2014, Robert Pattinson talks about his new film The Rover with Dave O’Neil, viewed 4 August 2015, http://www.smh.com.au/entertainment/robert-pattinson-talks-about-his-new-film-the-rover-with-dave-oneil-20140619-zs99j.html
Whitaker, R, Ramsey, J & Smith, R 2012, Media writing: print broadcast and public relations, 4th edn, Routledge, New York.