COMM1107 Media Writing Blog Activities Week 5 Inquiry: News article why it is an example of good journalism or media writing?

Find an article that has impact on you because of the sources, speech and reporting, and discuss why it is an example of good journalism or media writing.

My chosen article is Wenlei (2015) ‘Why are Aussie students still struggling to make ends meet?’.  Which shows a good example of journalism.

According to Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith (2012) news stories should be broken up into small paragraphs. The paragraphs in Wenlei (2015) are a little larger than they probably should be; however, it does not seem too large that it has caused unease with reading it.

The first paragraph is the lead that is used to catch the attention of those interested in Australia’s youth and their income (Hicks 2013). The story has been framed carefully to read like a ‘how to’ feature story by using the useful information and quotes on how to manage finances (Bainbridge Goc & Tynan 2011). The use of pictures, language and structure has created a tone which is both appealing to the eye and interesting (Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith 2012).

Figure 1: Money Saving Video Source Wenlei (2015)
Figure 1: Money Saving Video
Source Wenlei (2015)

A number of media have been included in this news article such as pictures and a video. The video includes a few tips on budgeting for those who may not know how to or those how have trouble with it.

The meaning conveyed is not reliant on the media used. Instead the media that is incorporated simply improves the appeal to the story. The pictures provides the reader with a break by separating the text (Bainbridge Goc & Tynan 2011).

Figure 2: The picture formatting Source: Wenlei (2015)
Figure 2: The picture formatting
Source: Wenlei (2015)

Sasha, Marcus and Jamie are the article’s sources. Sasha is a university student who shares her first hand experience (Wenlei 2015).

ME Bank chief executive Jamie McPhee and Marcus Hinneberg from Bendigo Student Association were sources who discussed how students are struggling with managing their finances and what they could be doing to improve on savings (Wenlei 2015).

Jamie McPhee provides examples of priority spending with necessities such as food and textbooks; whereas, items such as concert tickets and jeans should be ‘carefully considered’ (Wenlei 2015).

Wenlei (2015) uses fairly simple language in the article, with only really a few times where words like: “hand-to-mouth nature” or “middle-of-the-road scenarios” are used. Some audiences might not know what either of those statements mean.

Picture Reference

Wenlei, M 2015, Why are Aussie students still struggling to make ends meet?, digital image, viewed 13 august 2015, http://www.news.com.au/finance/money/why-are-aussie-students-still-struggling-to-make-ends-meet/story-e6frfmcr-1227262096015

References

Bainbridge, J, Goc, N & Tynan, L 2011, Media & Journalism, 2nd edn, Oxford University Press, South Melbourne.

Hicks, W 2013, English for journalists, 4th edn, Routledge, New York.

Wenlei, M 2015, Why are Aussie students still struggling to make ends meet?, viewed 13 august 2015, http://www.news.com.au/finance/money/why-are-aussie-students-still-struggling-to-make-ends-meet/story-e6frfmcr-1227262096015

Whitaker, R, Ramsey, J & Smith, R 2012, Media writing: print broadcast and public relations, 4th edn, Routledge, New York.

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2 thoughts on “COMM1107 Media Writing Blog Activities Week 5 Inquiry: News article why it is an example of good journalism or media writing?

  1. Hi Zoe
    That really is an interesting article you chose and it was nice to read about it from your perspective.
    I have a couple of suggestions that may be helpful to you.

    I wondered if you could somehow highlight that the first paragraph is the set question and not part of your response. Maybe you could make it bold or centre it?

    I also thought you could tighten the working of the second paragraph, as I think there is a bit of repetition with the question. For example “I believe Wenlei’s (2015) article ‘Why are Aussie students still struggling to make ends meet?’ is a good example of journalism”.

    In the third paragraph, you could probably introduce some critical thinking by backing up your observation of the paragraphs being too long with a reference. Perhaps from the textbook? Page 114 of Media Writing discusses how and when to break up text. In the second sentence of that paragraph, you could probably remove the words ‘that is written’ from the sentence to tighten it up a little.
    I wasn’t quite sure what the second sentence in the fourth paragraph meant. What do you mean when you say ‘gives a few times on budgeting’?

    You may want to review the second sentence in the fifth paragraph. I had a quick look at the article you reviewed and noted that it was only Jamie McPhee who discussed percentages, and the percentages more related to budgeting and record keeping than what they were spending their money on. Maybe you could refer to Marcus Hinneberg’s discussion about the difficulty students have finding a balance between work and school rather than percentages?

    My final suggestion relates to the final paragraph. I’m not sure, but I think you would say that it is Wenlei’s language rather than the article’s language. You could get around this by saying ‘the language in this article’ or ‘the language Wenlei uses’ or ‘Wenlei uses fairly simple language in the article’. Just food for thought….

    You made a good point that some audiences may not understand these phrases. Well done on your blog post Zoe. I am so far behind at the moment and am desperately trying to catch up. I have chosen an article that stood out to me but still haven’t reviewed it for the blog yet. That’s a job for this week! Thanks again for pointing out this article. It certainly was interesting.

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    1. Hi Rebecca

      Wow, thank you very much for your comment and constructive feedback, it was very helpful to me… unfortunately I am a little behind at the moment too, so this week I am trying to catch up and finish the assignment due… I will try to put in the suggestions you have made as soon as I can 🙂 thank you again… I look forward to reading your article.

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